When I extended my gaze
out towards that lake,
I saw in its depth,
another me staring back,
With curious eyes,
with a questioning look,
it asked me a question,
written in no book.
It asked me if I was still alive,
If I still enjoyed the little things,
If I still wished a wish for wings,
If I still give thanks to him,
for every bit,
for every thing.
If I still loved the dance
of the birds
If I still loved the clouds,
quenching the land’s thirst.
If I was still alive,
and was living my life,
why was I putting it at stake?
thinking of merging my unconcerned self,
with the clear, deserted
woodland lake.
~ Saadia
This is my entry for the Non β Love in More Than Ten Sentences challenge given to me by Nicodemas over at nicodemasplusthree. Thanks to you Nicodemas, I really enjoyed doing this.
This is a poem about a person who tries to commit suicide but his/her soul couldn’t let go and stopped him/her because he/she deserved to live , to love, to fight, to leave a mark on this world. This is not really a love poem but it is in a way that we love ourselves even when we have extinguished all sources of love, when we are alone, when no one seems to be there, we are there, just for ourselves. π
The rules for this challenge are easy. The word love must be in the poem, at least once. You need an adjective such as βunconcernedβ. There must be more than ten lines, and you need to link to my site with your poem. I really had fun with this all thanks to nicodemasplusthree.
I nominate the following people if they are interested in participating in the challenge. No pressure, only if you want to:
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Thank you again, Saadia, for the honor of the nomination! I will work on the challenge as soon as possible. Have a wonderful Sunday!
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Thanks for accepting it π have fun.
thanks π
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Already done π
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Checked it out. It is really great. Good job π
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π Thank you!
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Wow, Saadia this was haunting and beautiful..especially the way you ended “why was I putting it at stake?
thinking of merging my unconcerned self,
with the clear, deserted
woodland lake.”
I liked the background inspiration for this. Wonderful post Saadia π
Have a fantastic weekend β€
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Aaand thank you for the nomination, I’ll get to it ASAP ! π
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You are welcome. π
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Thank you, Zee. π I am glad that you liked it .Wishing you the same π
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WOW! You are amazing! I am glad I found your orbit sadia π
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Thank you. π
I extend my welcome to you π
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thankyou thankyou π
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Saadia, this is SO beautiful. The poetry is wonderful, and how you infused this very serious topic into the poem is absolutely amazing. Thank you for this! Blessings and peace to you.
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Thank you π I am glad that you liked it π
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